User talk:Gayentertain

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Grammar and Punctuation

I was going through your recent contributions to Smutty Sex Romp, which were actually quite impressive. There were just a few things I found myself needing to fix.

You accidentally switched from present to past tense on the page The stressed dad. I fixed it, but you can look back in the history to see where it happened. Everybody makes mistakes like this sometimes. I do it, you do it, and I bet even Platypus has done it before. It's just been kind of a headache to fix, since every branch from that page needs to be moved back to present tense. I'll come back to it tomorrow if you haven't fixed the tenses by then, but it would be mighty helpful if you wouldn't mind doing a few pages. Here are your recent contributions that need to be shifted back to present tense:

Also, your dialogue punctuation was inconsistent. Sometimes you had it right, and sometimes you missed the mark. While I'm writing/editing, I like to have this page open in another tab: Punctuation with dialogue. It's a quick, handy guide Platypus made.

It doesn't have a specific example for some structures you like to use though, so I've pulled a couple from your contribution, The stressed dad:

You remove you hand but say "meet me in the bathroom for a bit of stress relief."

^This one is not quite right.

You remove you hand but say, "Meet me in the bathroom for a bit of stress relief."

^This is correct, at least as far as dialogue punctuation. The first letter of the quote is capitalized, as it is its own line of dialogue (and could be a sentence on its own), and the comma before the quote separates it from the rest of the sentence.

This second one was actually pretty tricky. I had to google it myself because I wasn't sure how to punctuate it.

The man looked down at you and said "Wait 10 minutes till you come out." and turned to leave.

^Having a period at the end of the quote ends the sentence, making the 'and turned to leave' portion a fragment. Also, the tense has shifted to past when it should be present.

The man looks down at you and says, "Wait 10 minutes before you come out," and turns to leave.

^The tense has been shifted back, and a comma was added before the quote. And by ending the quote with a comma instead of a period, what was a fragment previously is now part of the sentence.

Dialogue punctuation is confusing, so I understand that you won't be suddenly perfect after I leave you this message. And I don't mind fixing punctuation so much-- it's just the tense shift that's really labor intensive.

I'm really not trying to get on you here; I have literally no authority, and the most I'll do is leave you another message. I just thought that someone who contributes as often as you do might like a couple pointers. I hope this helped!

--Pickles 05:56, 29 May 2020 (UTC)

Thank you, Pickles

Your note is actually very helpful and very well worded. I'll confess that I am not a native English speaker/writer (but I have lived in the US for over 15 years so I should be much better). I'll also say that frankly I generally create these stories mainly for myself because there did not seem to be a lot of gay content. Thinking I was only writing for myself I have never done the best job at proofreading or editing. However, your thoughtful words have enlightened me and I really appreciate your kind tone and helpful instruction so I will endeavor to do better in the go-forward.

Thank you so much!

--Gayentertain 00:18, 01 June 2020 (UTC)

I'm glad it helped, but I might have gone a little too far with my instruction. I don't want to take the fun out of writing for you. I think it's great to write for yourself, and not everything you (or anyone for that matter) write should be perfect. I might've left that comment less out of a sense for your wellbeing, and more because of my own frustration with fixing your pages. Awful hypocritical of me to ask you to do something because I don't want to.
And I would not have guessed that you weren't a native English speaker. People don't usually speak the way English is written, so someone could use it for a lifetime and never know how to punctuate properly. Most of your mistakes can and have been made by plenty of native English speakers, so don't feel self-conscious about it.
You've definitely increased the volume of gay content here, as it seems like most content published recently is gay. You might've inspired another user, LeonBlaze, to write gay content here too. I didn't hear that from Leon, but seeing so many of your contributions on the Recent Changes page probably made LeonBlaze feel more comfortable writing here too.
I think the best way to go forward is to write as you have been, and just fix the mistakes you notice. Don't give yourself a headache over it, and don't let my input discourage you. You'll get better as you go and notice these things for yourself the more you write. I'll be surprised if you don't end up correcting my grammar at some point. :)
--Pickles 02:25, 2 June 2020 (UTC)
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